Poetry help!?

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i'm asked pass teacher poem made here is...


wanna know think...

please.help...
please give constructive critisisms..not tactless words coz started writing sem...





wish you...
in endless silent night...
wrap arms around me
, never let go...

let time freeze,
let eternity strike,
fill empty space in heart.
carry me, both our separate hearts.

wish night true,
not fantasy
not dream
not nightmare.

let hours glaze upon sky,
our stars twinkle above blue horizon
let moon take peak onto earth,
sun sings lullaby.

never go away again,
never leave sight.
wish...
i’ll exchange have.

wish
in endless silent night.
while sea serenades me sleep…
while find way me….

i'm asked pass teacher poem made here is... wanna know think... please.help... please give constructive critisisms..not tactless words coz started writing sem... wish you... in endless silent...


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